I suppose it would be for the best if we didn't?
We should let you to write something first and then try to build it from there.
We should let you to write something first and then try to build it from there.
Well, I intend to write a short intro in @Mark Poe's style.I suppose it would be for the best if we didn't?
We should let you to write something first and then try to build it from there.
I am not certain of this, but perhaps don't use narration as a start of the story?They call themselves the Battalion, or 3/87, such a simple name for the breakers of lords and makers of the realm. Their own history says they came from the land of Amerika, fighting through the mountainous badlands of Afganistan, before arriving on this land.
Really? I didn't know that.But in the same time, it is often criticised when you start the story with narration.
Hmm, nothing yet. The focus of the story would be about the next generations, however, so it would be focused on them.Any ideas about a one specific scene you can start with?
I don't have better idea either, other than trying to start in the middle of battle and hook people up on what is going to happen next.Hmm, nothing yet. The focus of the story would be about the next generations, however, so it would be focused on them.
I don't know if the former would work, since I have no battles planned yet, but perhaps the latter could work with now seasoned soldier of the Battalion reminiscing about how it came to the present day.I don't have better idea either, other than trying to start in the middle of battle and hook people up on what is going to happen next.
Alternatively, start with a moment that the present day people were transported to different world.
Instead of reminiscing, just write about actual event how they were transported to a different world, as it is a present day, otherwise it would just be narration in a different form. Show, don't tell.I don't know if the former would work, since I have no battles planned yet, but perhaps the latter could work with now seasoned soldier of the Battalion reminiscing about how it came to the present day.
Admittedly, I am reluctant because I am pretty sure I would make a mistake in depicting the US Army from 2002 faithfully.Instead of reminiscing, just write about actual event how they were transported to a different world, as it is a present day, otherwise it would just be narration in a different form. Show, don't tell.
I think in this particular scenario I think this scene makes a perfect scene for a prelude or prologue
I think that key point isn't to depicting them faithfully, but do so in positive light. Generally, that's what Hollywood really does.Admittedly, I am reluctant because I am pretty sure I would make a mistake in depicting the US Army from 2002 faithfully.
Perhaps writing it in POV of the locals first encountering the Battalion could work instead? That way any mistakes could be glossed over as the lack of knowledge on the locals' part.I think that key point isn't to depicting them faithfully, but do so in positive light. Generally, that's what Hollywood really does.
Make them look well, and Americans will like it.
Of course, if you are still worried about faithful depiction, you can choose other nation military instead, if it helps. They can disappear during some exercise etc.
I wasn't aware I have a style besides biting sarcasm, dark humor, and hentai references.Well, I intend to write a short intro in @Mark Poe's style.
Any advice you can make on how to write an intro/prologue?I wasn't aware I have a style besides biting sarcasm, dark humor, and hentai references.
Don't be overdramatic, unless you really think the situation calls for it.Any advice you can make on how to write an intro/prologue?
I mean:Don't be overdramatic, unless you really think the situation calls for it.
How is this idea?Perhaps writing it in POV of the locals first encountering the Battalion could work instead? That way any mistakes could be glossed over as the lack of knowledge on the locals' part.
What do you think will interest readers more? Our world's people encounter with a fantasy setting, or fantasy's world people encounter with ours?Perhaps writing it in POV of the locals first encountering the Battalion could work instead? That way any mistakes could be glossed over as the lack of knowledge on the locals' part.
Yeah, I totally forgot about that. Maybe I should just ignore my feelings of inadequacy and just try to write.Another thing is how to explain something from native perspective.
They don't have word for cars, rifles, etc.
And you often explain things how they would look compared to something from our world. Isn't it better to actually use our world person's view?
Exactly, just do it. It can't be worse than my isekai story.Yeah, I totally forgot about that. Maybe I should just ignore my feelings of inadequacy and just try to write.
Actually, it might be. But I am more worried about my lack of knowledge rather than the quality of writing.Exactly, just do it. It can't be worse than my isekai story.
It's mostly in another world, as long as you don't fellatio/wank any particular nationality you're generally safe from the AH crowd. Also have you thought about posting it on QQ first? Jokes aside they're really forgiving (hell my shitty sci fi story got a lot of positive feedback even when it was obvious I was making shit up as I go).Actually, it might be. But I am more worried about my lack of knowledge rather than the quality of writing.
Last time I was there, I threw a hissy fit, made a really stupid decision, and never looked back, so I am kinda afraid to go back.Also have you thought about posting it on QQ first?
Ah, that last part might have been an issue... although don't about the other parts. It's wasn't as if I haven't acted skeevy, went dark for the better part of 2 years, came back and pretend nothing had happened, and they reveal who I was on April fool's day.Last time I was there, I threw a hissy fit, made a really stupid decision, and never looked back, so I am kinda afraid to go back.
Also, I forgot the password.
*Shrug* If you say so.Ah, that last part might have been an issue... although don't about the other parts. It's wasn't as if I haven't acted skeevy, went dark for the better part of 2 years, came back and pretend nothing had happened, and they reveal who I was on April fool's day.
Trust me, they're very forgiving.
Well, they are Americans, what would you expect?Admittedly, I want to know more about the mentality of US soldiers back in 2002, but I guess I cannot wait.
Rather miffed about the whole 9/11 thing?Well, they are Americans, what would you expect?
Because I think the way they think would determine their course of actions on the strange new world. Admittedly, I already have some ideas and they are mostly unconnected to the American soldiers' mentality and more with the situation on the ground, but still.Either way, Americans don't care about realism as long as they are potrayed in positive light, this is how Hollywood handles things. I don't see a reason why it should work differently for you.